tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1111229284977476511.post2274411793729459766..comments2023-07-02T01:18:22.626-07:00Comments on The WriteRunner: Interjections! Excitement! Emotion!Andrew Rosenberghttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09215333688753781447noreply@blogger.comBlogger13125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1111229284977476511.post-50489409210119098432012-06-18T11:18:20.885-07:002012-06-18T11:18:20.885-07:00Good post about interjections.
http://www.studycha...Good post about interjections.<br />http://www.studychamps.com/Andrew Rosenberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09215333688753781447noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1111229284977476511.post-28513292645415315562011-07-16T09:46:48.492-07:002011-07-16T09:46:48.492-07:00Very good point and illustration.
I'm not sure...Very good point and illustration.<br />I'm not sure external actions/reactions are sufficient, I think the internal reactions are important too. Maybe it depends on the style of the story.<br />But I'm always looking for better ways to show these things. Thanks for the comment!Andrew Rosenberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09215333688753781447noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1111229284977476511.post-23360981605310301422011-07-15T19:44:56.405-07:002011-07-15T19:44:56.405-07:00It's not about adding more emotive language bu...It's not about adding more emotive language but about feeling your character's emotions and then write a scene to show how they feel through their actions and reactions. For instance, if your MC is a teen who's just lost his mom in an accident, you can write (depending on how important this is to the plot) a scene to show how he feels. He's angry and sad... <br />Jack looked down at the cheap pine coffin carrying his mom's broken body. Tis was wrong. His mom shouldn't have died. Father Allan put a comforting hand on his shoulder. "Son,' he began. Jack shook the priest's hand off. Undaunted, the priest continued, "I know it's hard for you to accept that this God's will...," <br />"What the f' do you know? You just met me!" <br />This isn't good and it would have to be developed further but this is the way to show so the reader can get an idea of the turmoil going inside the character's heart. <br />Telling would be something like: Jack felt his heart being ripped into tiny pieces as he looked down at the cheap pine coffin carrying his mom's broken body. Tears started to well up but he held them back. He wasn't going to cry. He was too angry for that. The bastard drunk who took her life... Andrew Rosenberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09215333688753781447noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1111229284977476511.post-76212641343245041892011-03-26T08:31:23.158-07:002011-03-26T08:31:23.158-07:00Kind of. It may be a question of which metaphor wo...Kind of. It may be a question of which metaphor works for you. ;)<br /><br />"Show, don't tell" isn't as much about POV as just how the story is told(shown) in general. If I say "she was frustrated" I'm focusing the POV but to "show" frustration I might say "she dug her nails into her palms".<br />The point of this post is to not omit reaction when moods change. <br />"She hung up the phone. She made some coffee." <br />might not be as effective as <br />"She hit 'end' and tossed the phone on the bed, stomped to the kitchen, and threw on a pot of coffee, anticipating a long night ahead."<br /><br />Thanks for the comment!Andrew Rosenberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09215333688753781447noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1111229284977476511.post-76146126561260786392011-03-25T21:22:09.140-07:002011-03-25T21:22:09.140-07:00I think perhaps "show, don't tell" m...I think perhaps "show, don't tell" means not pointing the camera at any part of the POV character, but rather having the character become the camera.Andrew Rosenberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09215333688753781447noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1111229284977476511.post-61889106036825197202011-03-24T08:33:36.109-07:002011-03-24T08:33:36.109-07:00It's hard to figure out how much word count to...It's hard to figure out how much word count to spend on different aspects. If I spend all my words describing things then nothing <i>happens.</i>Andrew Rosenberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09215333688753781447noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1111229284977476511.post-66220239268228375962011-03-24T08:31:49.856-07:002011-03-24T08:31:49.856-07:00It was a good talk. Some of the stuff I was like &...It was a good talk. Some of the stuff I was like "yeah, yeah, whatevs" but that one point really stuck with me.Andrew Rosenberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09215333688753781447noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1111229284977476511.post-48655678987197893652011-03-24T08:30:19.748-07:002011-03-24T08:30:19.748-07:00I'm signed up for another conference in August...I'm signed up for another conference in August, but I'm still hoping that I'll find an agent this round. I think the story itself is really good, it's just a question of finding the right audience.Andrew Rosenberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09215333688753781447noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1111229284977476511.post-11209648596359303172011-03-24T08:28:46.693-07:002011-03-24T08:28:46.693-07:00Thanks!Thanks!Andrew Rosenberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09215333688753781447noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1111229284977476511.post-7020830803562369832011-03-23T19:42:33.941-07:002011-03-23T19:42:33.941-07:00Hi, Andrew! I know what you mean. Feel, sensory de...Hi, Andrew! I know what you mean. Feel, sensory detail, show--I love doing that stuff. I tend to get heavy on the emotional side but thin on the setting and character description. What a load to balance!<br /><br /><a href="http://elizabethmueller.blogspot.com/" rel="nofollow">♥.•*¨ Elizabeth ¨*•.♥</a>Andrew Rosenberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09215333688753781447noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1111229284977476511.post-75948874820710450802011-03-23T16:30:21.765-07:002011-03-23T16:30:21.765-07:00Your MS is really good, it will def find a home so...Your MS is really good, it will def find a home soon. I missed Bill's Talk for PNWA, was not feeling great that day.Andrew Rosenberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09215333688753781447noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1111229284977476511.post-42602741149762007752011-03-21T17:31:24.052-07:002011-03-21T17:31:24.052-07:00Keep at it Andrew. You know you'll get there....Keep at it Andrew. You know you'll get there. Its a great story concept, with exciting characters and vivid action. The right agent will come along.<br /><br />........dholeAndrew Rosenberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09215333688753781447noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1111229284977476511.post-73944268154882403132011-03-21T13:16:07.796-07:002011-03-21T13:16:07.796-07:00Great post! Best of luck with the agent search.
S...Great post! Best of luck with the agent search.<br /><br /><a href="http://fromsarahwithjoy.blogspot.com/" rel="nofollow">Sarah Allen<br />(my creative writing blog)</a>Andrew Rosenberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09215333688753781447noreply@blogger.com